The Escape Chapter 5
When I awoke I felt woozy and unstable. I was in a room with bars over the door and windows. It looked like a prison. It probably was. “How did they know I was coming?”I asked myself. “Gosh I should have been more careful,”I sighed angrily with myself. Suddenly the door clanged open and I felt myself staring down a guard with a taser across his chest. “You’re coming with us,”he barked grabbing my arm and heaving me down the hall. While they took me somewhere I studied them. They had tasers but they didn’t know how to use them. They were holding my hands behind my back so tripped them. The floor rang with two heads clunking against it. Those two were out cold. I grabbed their tasers and was about to leave the room when I heard a voice.
“Hey may you get me out of here,”a female voice exclaimed. I heard the voice coming from the barred door next to mine. I snagged the keys from the guard and unlocked her door. Once the door was unlocked a girl about my age came running out and started hugging me saying,”Thanks now let’s get out of here.” She ran out of the room with her long black hair trailing behind her. “Shhhhh once I get you out here you’ll have to explain yourself,”I said. I told her to stay behind me and we quietly walked down the hall looking for a exit. “There’s a guard,”the girl told me pointing to a guard that I was sneaking on. He turned around saw me and ran toward an emergency button where he slammed his hand down on it. Suddenly an alarm came blaring from the building.
You are such a good writer. Your stories always have action and people getting knocked out. Whenever I read, I can imagine it in my head exactly what it’s like, and a brilliant story like yours does that. Keep it up!
THANKS A LOT
I agree with Cillman. Can’t wait till your next chapter!
Love it, as usual
But….(oh no, criticism DX) try adding, perhaps, a little more detail to each scene…to make it longer. Yes, feel free to argue with me xD
Keep it up(: