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Comment on Just Be Friends – Chapter Four – Screaming Laughter by ALooseAvian

ALooseAvian — Mon, 06 Feb 2012 02:36:12 +0000

I don’t know why i didn’t think of the question sooner but does Arizona know about Zaks cat power? Does she like use the secret against him?

Comment on Just Be Friends – Chapter Four – Screaming Laughter by xThreeDaysGracex

xThreeDaysGracex — Sun, 05 Feb 2012 13:18:14 +0000

Haha, thanks everyone….and Cillman…uh….^-^; HA! XD I never thought of that, I think I was in too much of a desperate rush to finish Smile, Troubled Soul, and yup, Just Be Friends is a little different because I’m TRYING (and failing) to go for a upbeat kind of thing (because, Detroit, no matter what hardship she suffers, she always tries to keep smiling)
PS:Thanks raqshan(:
PPS: ALooseAvian, I’m glad you like the name Doodle XD I spent a while trying to think of a good name for a darn dog XD

Comment on Peasant…Or Princess?- Chapter Six by xThreeDaysGracex

xThreeDaysGracex — Sun, 05 Feb 2012 13:13:59 +0000

Wow! I really like this! Specially the ending! Keep it up
PS: I LOVE ADELE!! ;D

Comment on Just Be Friends – Chapter Four – Screaming Laughter by Cillman

Cillman — Sun, 05 Feb 2012 11:02:13 +0000

I really don’t like pointing out plotholes, but how did detroit explain how roux died? Does her mom even know??
Anyway, I enjoyed this chapter it’s really good and so are the first three. For some reason “Just be Friends” seems like a different style of writing then “Smile, Troubled soul” but I really love them both.

Comment on Just Be Friends – Chapter Four – Screaming Laughter by ALooseAvian

ALooseAvian — Sun, 05 Feb 2012 04:45:40 +0000

hahahahahaha cool. Great chapter. Abuse is soo horrible.
P.S. I didn’t comment on your last chapter and just to say, I absolutly, possitvly, LOVE the name Doodle!!!! I don’t know but I would NEVER BE ABLE TO THINK OF THAT GREAT OF A NAME! ok ok getting off subject. This story is coming along really well! Keep it up!

Comment on Just Be Friends – Chapter Four – Screaming Laughter by raqshan

raqshan — Sun, 05 Feb 2012 04:07:25 +0000

You love inserting lyrics into your chapters don’t you? Anyway, this was very good. You are right, abuse to women is often told. However, abuse to men is uncommon in stories. Still, Zak seems like he is too nice. Besides, Detroit was right, Arizona is a total…snob.
Can’t wait for the next chapter.

P.S. The previous chapter was good too. I didn’t leave much comments because I was rushing to read this one.

Comment on Just Be Friends – Chapter Three – Bruises by raqshan

raqshan — Sun, 05 Feb 2012 03:58:01 +0000

Great. I saw that you already posted your next chapter. I am kinda in a rush to read it so I’ll give you my thoughts of this chapter there too.

Comment on Just Be Friends – Chapter Two – Love Hurts by xThreeDaysGracex

xThreeDaysGracex — Sat, 04 Feb 2012 22:14:27 +0000

Indeed
And yes, all will be revealed very soon…xD Yup, totally. She needs a slap xD

Comment on WRITERS BLOCK EALENATE NEEDS HELP by raqshan

raqshan — Sat, 04 Feb 2012 21:03:54 +0000

Maybe you coulld do a different topic, too? What other things interest you? Mystery? Fiction? History? If you can’t think of a story in a minute, then try this.

1. Pick one topic: mystery, history, fantasy, or adventure.
2. Pick a main character: boy or girl
3. Pick a problem: something connected with the topic and it causes problems for the main character
4. add details: other side characters, setting, theme

5. Have FUN!!

Comment on Just Be Friends – Chapter Two – Love Hurts by raqshan

raqshan — Sat, 04 Feb 2012 20:45:28 +0000

You do have a good plot here. I am glad you continued. Zak’s behaviour was uncalled for but Arizona’s attidute was expected. However, I am sure Zak will come to his senses soon enough.

Comment on WRITERS BLOCK EALENATE NEEDS HELP by ALooseAvian

ALooseAvian — Sat, 04 Feb 2012 07:07:43 +0000

haha. lol. got the wrong idea. You want to do another story? Well you seem to like the whole army thing so maybe you could do something like a battle against aliens or something. like an intergalactic battle. thats would be kind of cool

Comment on WRITERS BLOCK EALENATE NEEDS HELP by ealenate

ealenate — Sat, 04 Feb 2012 01:15:21 +0000

GUYS IM NOT TALKING ABOUT MY STORY ONE MAN ARMY I AM TRYING TO WRITE A DIFFERENT STORY OKAY SO IF YOU GOT SUGGESTIONS ON A DIFFERENT STORY I WOULD BE HAPPY

Comment on WRITERS BLOCK EALENATE NEEDS HELP by ALooseAvian

ALooseAvian — Sat, 04 Feb 2012 00:46:51 +0000

umm all I was trying to say was something should lead to a SAVE THE WORLD plot. thats it. I never said he HAD to do it. he asked for help and opinions and I gave it. is that a problem?

Comment on WRITERS BLOCK EALENATE NEEDS HELP by Cillman

Cillman — Fri, 03 Feb 2012 15:25:58 +0000

That story idea sounds pretty good ALooseAvian. But I just think you shouldn’t tell people too much what they should do or the plot is basically your idea. Don’t take this the wrong way, it sounds good, but just try to give someone only the lead on the story.

Comment on Just Be Friends – Chapter One – Can We Start Again…? by Cillman

Cillman — Fri, 03 Feb 2012 15:19:12 +0000

There’s gonna be more if this is chapter one, right?

Comment on Just Be Friends – Chapter One – Can We Start Again…? by raqshan

raqshan — Fri, 03 Feb 2012 04:03:18 +0000

Wait is it over. No right? I have to know what happens next!! Please!

Comment on WRITERS BLOCK EALENATE NEEDS HELP by ALooseAvian

ALooseAvian — Fri, 03 Feb 2012 03:20:27 +0000

help in the one man army? ok then. He wakes up and find a gun pointed at his head. but its only a kid and he is scared out of his mind He’s all like ‘who are are you and what are you doing here’ but he stammers cuz he’s only 5 or 6. then he could be like, ‘my daddy won’t be happy when he finds you here, he taught me how to use a gun.’ but like in the end a fire catches in the kitchen and the kid is all scared and so Tyler gets away and saves the boy. then the kids dad come home, sees his house is burnt down, and blames it on the kid until he sees Tyler but when he tries to kill Tyler, the boy is all angry at his dad from blaming him and trying to kill Tyler (kid warms up to Tyler when he saves him) his father freaks out is all like ‘your exactly like your mother! Thank God she’s dead!’ and the kid cries. Tyler manages to get away but is stuck with a boy and a failed mission. The man that gets away is now is #1 enemy and the reason Tyler was fired from his job cuz the man is like, taking over the world. That should get you started on a whole SAVE THE WORLD FROM MASS DESTRUCTION! plot and he is still stuck with the kid. oh and maybe thrown in someone else who becomes his best friend or girlfriend or something.All right thats all I got. is it too much? does it help? How you get over writers block!! Good luck!!

Comment on WRITERS BLOCK EALENATE NEEDS HELP by ALooseAvian

ALooseAvian — Fri, 03 Feb 2012 02:51:46 +0000

what do you need help in?

Comment on Just Be Friends – Chapter One – Can We Start Again…? by ealenate

ealenate — Fri, 03 Feb 2012 01:29:41 +0000

WOW THIS SHOULD BE A LOVE STORY NICE JOB

Comment on Barbarians chapter 26 by ealenate

ealenate — Fri, 03 Feb 2012 01:27:37 +0000

GOOD STORY